Adrienne, the aspect I enjoy most about your poem is that the "emphasis" seems to come on the words following the design vocabulary. "Layers DANCE, Colors MOLD". I think this is an interesting feature because the design vocabulary is the subject but the secondary verbs are what is really describing your perspective. On a side note, I feel that your poem needs further depth to its content. It's moving, but also vague, don't be afraid to elaborate your ideas.
Adrienne, the aspect I enjoy most about your poem is that the "emphasis" seems to come on the words following the design vocabulary. "Layers DANCE, Colors MOLD". I think this is an interesting feature because the design vocabulary is the subject but the secondary verbs are what is really describing your perspective. On a side note, I feel that your poem needs further depth to its content. It's moving, but also vague, don't be afraid to elaborate your ideas.
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